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“Please, just hear me out,” Naruto cried.

Hinata’s eyes widened.

“I… I love you.”

Hinata mouthed his words, breathless.

“I don’t care how you feel about Sasuke,” Naruto said shakily, “This is how I feel, and that’s never going to change. I love you, Sakura-chan.”

Sakura’s eyes dropped to the ground.

“I’m sorry, Naruto,” she said with an eerie calm that seemed to settle on the surroundings like a blanket of cold.

Hinata’s eyes narrowed at the pink-haired girl. Would she deny him yet again?

“Sakura…” Naruto whispered.

“Naruto, he’s coming back! I know he is…” Sakura broke off, tears welling up in her eyes, “he will… he will… he will…” Her sobs caught in her throat like a broken record, making her repeat those two hopeful but futile words.

Hinata sighed. She knew that Sakura would not let go of Sasuke so easily, but to hurt Naruto in the process did not seem necessary to Hinata.

“Saukra-chan…” Naruto whispered again, “he will come back. I’ll bring him home. I’ll drag him back to Konoha if it would make you happy…”

“Naruto, don’t try to,” Sakura began.

“Don’t try to what, Sakura? Sasuke doesn’t give a damn about us anymore!” Naruto paused, realizing the hurtful words he had just uttered. “S-Sakura, I didn’t mean that…”

“No… it’s okay, Naruto,” Sakura whispered, “I know you’ve never really liked Sasuke to begin with…”

“No!” Naruto grabbed Sakura’s hand abruptly, “It isn’t that… he lives the life of an avenger. He has chosen a path that does not involve love…”

Sakura ripped her hand from his grip, “Oh, what will you say next, Naruto? That he doesn’t know how to love?”

Hinata watched as Naruto’s eyes glistened moistly, “He cannot love,” he said sadly, “not as he is. And he isn’t about to change.”

Sakura had all but cried a river by this time. She stumbled forward into Naruto’s arms. He put them around her lovingly.

“Sakura… I’ll always be here for you…” he whispered.

“I know…” she sobbed, gripping him tighter.

Hinata’s eyes widened further. The sight was too much for her. Why? Why was Sakura changing her mind now? Why, when Hinata was so close? Hinata loved Naruto more than that pathetic kunoichi ever could… more than anyone ever… ever…

A hand reached up and covered her eyes, while another wrapped itself gently around her waist, pulling her away.

Hinata was too frightened to move or even speak. What if Naruto discovered that she had been eavesdropping?

What would he think of her?

“You shouldn’t have to see that,” a familiar voice sighed.

“Ne…Neji nii-san?” she whispered.

Almost as concurrence to her question, the hand was removed from her eyes and went to her cheek. Neji spun her to face him. Her face caught in the crook of his hand, he rubbed his thumb gently against her pale cheek.

Something in his eyes, his startling white eyes, caught her attention.

“Neji nii-san… are you?” she said in a tone barely more than a whisper.

Neji cleared his throat softly and blinked away the remnants of his tears. “No, Hinata-sama,” he muttered.

“N-Neji-san…” Hinata breathed as he stroked her face, from the forehead, to the cheek, to the chin, and down to the neck, “W-what are you…?”

“You’re so pale,” Neji murmured, not seeming to hear her. Without warning, he pulled her in close.

A warm embrace.

“What are you doing, Neji-san?” Hinata choked out.

“I am protecting you, Hinata-sama,” Neji whispered into her ear, “As I always have, and always will.”
©2006-2009 ~forbiddenmyth
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Author's Comments

A NejiHina oneshot.

If you don't like Hyugacest, don't flame meh! TT_TT

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:iconkumorinoko:
Hm, that NejiHina halfway through caught me off guard. =P That part was well done, though--your description of their interaction comes through very clearly. The writing is decent, and I sympathize with Hinata as she watches Naruto and Sakura.

Writing Advice: Where is this taking place? Where are Naruto and Sakura, and where is Hinata watching from? I'm guessing she's somewhere where they don't notice her, but she can see and hear them, but where? When exactly is this taking place? We know it's after Sasuke defected, but how long after? Before Naruto left to train with Jiraiya, or possibly after? The emotional interactions between the characters are strong, but location-wise they're floating in a void.

Minor Nitpicks: Naruto has a very rough, casual speaking style. He wouldn't say "he has" or "cannot," but instead "he's" or "can't." The phrase "almost as concurrence to" should be "almost in concurrence with," though even corrected that might sound a little too formal.

Now I'm putting my Inner Editor back to sleep. When it comes to pairings involving these characters, I'm definitely a NaruHina person, because it wins at cute. :heart: But I'm not gonna get upset if they aren't together. I kind of doubt it'll happen in the manga, sadly. If Naruto ends up with someone besides Hinata, it would have to be Sakura, though I'm not wild about that. -.-; As for NejiHina, I'm just happy they aren't full siblings. Because in anime fandoms, you take what you can get! :D So, yeah, those are my opinions on that. Keep writing!
:iconcrapscraps:
I remember reading this. This was posted in the Hyugacest community or something, right? Or did I read this off of ff.net? :O
:iconaoina:
:giggles insanely:
Suckura...
Mind if I borrow that?

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Sometimes life hands you lemons...But I'm allergic to lemons.

On the road of life, don't pick up hitch hikers.

-Aoina Quotes
:iconmireisen:
Perfect! Was looking for this one and glad you posted, this is one of my favs!
:iconforbiddenmyth:
:D Thank you! Hope to see you again!

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Not gonna raichu a love song.
:iconhyperkittikat:
Aw that was so sweet... Sure Im a bit more of a Naruto and Sasuke fan but still...Its so sweet! I'm glad that you made a naruto fanfic.. Its so cute ^-^ I'm also a fan f Neji but it bothered me a bit about them being cusins... But I still love it none-the-less. You truely have a way with words... Im touched..

*wipes tear away*
:iconforbiddenmyth:
Aww... thank you!

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Not gonna raichu a love song.
:iconinoshikacho101:
*laughing hysterically* SUCKERA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!! You and I must share the same brain!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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"'Die, mortal!' Oh, did I do good, Temari?! I'll make cookies for us! And I'll use sugar this time! Not sand! Unless you want sand? No? Then, sugar it is!"
:iconforbiddenmyth:
LOL! She's even annoying AFTER the time skip.

Srsly, she and Sassy deserve one another.

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Not gonna raichu a love song.

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